Topic: Sands of Time
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Unknow

Mon 02/27/23 06:17 AM

Some people look
Some people see

Some people give
Some people take

Some people love
Some people hurt

But Darling I assure you
I don't belong to some.
I'll see you in your light.
I'll give you everything you deserve.
I'll love only you to heaven and beyond.
Till our very last moments in the sands of time.
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JulieABush

Mon 02/27/23 12:26 PM

Nice poem:thumbsup: :wink: .
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AαƚHҽҽɾα

Mon 02/27/23 11:30 PM

Lovely :purple_heart:

Keep writing :slight_smile:
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Vibes

Tue 02/28/23 12:39 AM

Nice write

Assuring and
Ensuring
All over
Love pouring
Exuberance
Ever lasting!

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Laska Paul

Tue 02/28/23 02:27 AM


I will just say it is quite Okay .
There is no Wow factor in the Poem .
So , .....! JK..
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Unknow

Tue 02/28/23 03:17 AM

I will just say it is quite Okay .
There is no Wow factor in the Poem .
So , .....! JK..

No worries. I am always open for constructive criticism. It's an avenue for me to improve. Thank you!
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Unknow

Tue 02/28/23 03:18 AM

Nice poem:thumbsup: :wink: .

Much Appreciated :heart:
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Laska Paul

Tue 02/28/23 03:33 AM


A poem should be felt and the comments we make should reflect the way you felt as you analyzed it . However this is not criticism. Its just a positive compliment so you can work better on your next poem .
We as readers need WOW factor in Poems !
Looking forward for your next creativity .
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Unknow

Tue 02/28/23 03:36 AM

A poem should be felt and the comments we make should reflect the way you felt as you analyzed it . However this is not criticism. Its just a positive compliment so you can work better on your next poem .
We as readers need WOW factor in Poems !
Looking forward for your next creativity .

I'll keep that in mind. I've posted another poem. You can check it out if you have time. Thank you!:smile:
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Unknow

Tue 02/28/23 03:36 AM

Nice write

Assuring and
Ensuring
All over
Love pouring
Exuberance
Ever lasting!

Thank you!:sparkling_heart:
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Unknow

Tue 02/28/23 03:42 AM

Lovely :purple_heart:

Keep writing :slight_smile:

Thank you :sparkling_heart:
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Ꮢ Ꭷ Ᏸ ɨ Ꮑ

Tue 02/28/23 09:15 AM

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Darling, I would be the wind behind your sails I would be the one to tell your tales I would be the one to hold your secrets I would be your Earth when all else fails So if you're ever scared to jump before me Take the fear off of your face 'Cause I would be the one to write your story And I won't forget a single page But you could be the author Oh darling, you could be the author Oh darling, you could be the author I'll begin by writing down your name You and I would be the characters will meet by the 7th page Suburban drama, picture perfect in the frame But by the 7th chapter things would never be the same 'Cause, 8th grade we met, it wouldn't be the last time This experience, that I meet you in a past life Heroes in our story save the world like a past time But the road to happy ending's ain't a fast line The epiphany in chapter 22 Recurring demon me, living life without you Some would call it tragic, but it's only just a start 'Cause even fate couldn't keep them apart Darling, I would be the wind behind your sails I would be the one to tell your tales I would be the one to hold your secrets I would be your Earth when all else fails So if you're ever scared to jump before me Take the fear off of your face 'Cause I would be the one to write your story And I won't forget a single page But you could be the author Oh darling, you could be the author Oh darling, you could be the author So follow me through the page Don't pray for perfection I won't be the one to save you from all your questions I still see that you are brave despite the scars you hide Don't turn away from the night Don't you turn away from the night Darling, I would be the wind behind your sails I would be the one to tell your tales I would be the one to hold your secrets I would be your Earth when all else fails So if you're ever scared to jump before me Take the fear off of your face 'Cause I would be the one to write your story And I won't forget a single page But you could be the author Oh darling, you could be the author Oh darling, you could be the author


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Redcarpet

Wed 03/01/23 02:17 AM


Some people look
Some people see

Some people give
Some people take

Some people love
Some people hurt

But Darling I assure you
I don't belong to some.
I'll see you in your light.
I'll give you everything you deserve.
I'll love only you to heaven and beyond.
Till our very last moments in the sands of time.


..AND WHERE IS HE SO THAT HE CAN READ
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Complain

Sun 03/05/23 07:15 AM

well to spoken
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Eleana

Mon 09/25/23 11:48 PM

Interesting to read!
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Chqinitout

Sat 09/30/23 05:18 PM

I also have a sands of time poem I wrote years ago...

The sands of time are in my mind
And I don't know what to say.
Will I recall a darkened hall
Or a place I used to play.
Memories like falling trees
Crash about my head
Till one escapes
And then it makes
A memory that I dread.
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Unknow

Thu 10/12/23 10:28 AM

Interesting
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Unknow

Thu 10/12/23 03:37 PM

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