Wanting honest females opinion, from appearance to wording. Things can always be improved. The "dry" conversations are such a negative aspect of this. No matter what I say or ask, some girls only say "hey", or "good, you?" Nothing to go off of

Okay, since you ask honesty...
You look unhappy and not sober.
Generally people look for someone who's full of life, positive and with a happy aura.

Your write up conveys you just want sex. A sex buddy.
Not what women in general are looking for.

All in all an unappealing profile.